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Message de rosasse33 posté le 03-03-2017 à 14:05:47 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai une rédaction à faire en anglais, pour la rentrée, j'aurais donc besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait :
Voilà le sujet :
Tâche finale : écrire un mail à son futur soi (possibilité de l'envoyer sur futurem.org). Exprimer ses espoirs, sa vision du futur ( when I'm older,...I'll will..., etc...)
Et voici ma proposition :
Dear Futur Me,
This year, my teacher of english, miss Delpuech, asked me to write a letter for my futur. I did with pleasur.
When you read this letter, you will probably grown and you will become a strong woman as you wanted.
You should remember yours teenage dreams :
“When I grow up,
-I’m going to be a great architect,
-I intend to building a family,
-I plan on becoming bilingual (French/English),
-I’ll visit the New Zealand and the USA,
-I intend to establish a business with my cousins and my brother,
-I’ll spend less time on my phone,
-I plan on having a diploma,
-I’d like get married with a sporty and good man,
-I’m going to changing the world,
-I’d like very much meet a great dancers,
- I intend to becoming more positive,
- I’ll provide my family with a healthy and happy life.”
And I hope my life will be the way I want it to be.
If it is not the way I wanted, it’s not so bad, as long as you and your family in health and happiness.
Merci et bonne journée.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-03-2017 23:30
Message de rosasse33 posté le 03-03-2017 à 14:05:47 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai une rédaction à faire en anglais, pour la rentrée, j'aurais donc besoin d'une correction s'il vous plait :
Voilà le sujet :
Tâche finale : écrire un mail à son futur soi (possibilité de l'envoyer sur futurem.org). Exprimer ses espoirs, sa vision du futur ( when I'm older,...I'll will..., etc...)
Et voici ma proposition :
Dear Futur Me,
This year, my teacher of english, miss Delpuech, asked me to write a letter for my futur. I did with pleasur.
When you read this letter, you will probably grown and you will become a strong woman as you wanted.
You should remember yours teenage dreams :
“When I grow up,
-I’m going to be a great architect,
-I intend to building a family,
-I plan on becoming bilingual (French/English),
-I’ll visit the New Zealand and the USA,
-I intend to establish a business with my cousins and my brother,
-I’ll spend less time on my phone,
-I plan on having a diploma,
-I’d like get married with a sporty and good man,
-I’m going to changing the world,
-I’d like very much meet a great dancers,
- I intend to becoming more positive,
- I’ll provide my family with a healthy and happy life.”
And I hope my life will be the way I want it to be.
If it is not the way I wanted, it’s not so bad, as long as you and your family in health and happiness.
Merci et bonne journée.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 03-03-2017 23:30
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