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Message de kaleid posté le 14-01-2015 à 20:19:35 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir!
Je souhaiterais que quelqu'un s'il a le temps et la bonté puisse m'aider à corriger mon texte.
Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui prendront le temps de m'aider!
The document is a photomontage do by Barbara Kruger in 1987.
What I find striking immediately is the slogan "I shop therefore I am". Furthermore, when it is a hand who is holding that little-card shaped sign that reads the slogan.Moreover the the artis use only three colours:grey for the hand,white for the sign and red for the message.The red is used for the letter in order to stand out against the white and black background.It's also a use for the viewer to be shock ,since the colours of the message is violent and aggressive.
I thinks that the artist goal is to denounce the overconsumption of the society,that is going to destroy the World.Since the consumer society create the inequality between the diferents states.And this overconsumption requests a large amount of first materials that the Earth doesn't have.As a result of the use of chemical products,that pollute our World.
Sur ce je vous souhaite à tous une bonne soirée!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-01-2015 21:26
Message de kaleid posté le 14-01-2015 à 20:19:35 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir!
Je souhaiterais que quelqu'un s'il a le temps et la bonté puisse m'aider à corriger mon texte.
Je remercie d'avance ceux ou celles qui prendront le temps de m'aider!
The document is a photomontage do by Barbara Kruger in 1987.
What I find striking immediately is the slogan "I shop therefore I am". Furthermore, when it is a hand who is holding that little-card shaped sign that reads the slogan.Moreover the the artis use only three colours:grey for the hand,white for the sign and red for the message.The red is used for the letter in order to stand out against the white and black background.It's also a use for the viewer to be shock ,since the colours of the message is violent and aggressive.
I thinks that the artist goal is to denounce the overconsumption of the society,that is going to destroy the World.Since the consumer society create the inequality between the diferents states.And this overconsumption requests a large amount of first materials that the Earth doesn't have.As a result of the use of chemical products,that pollute our World.
Sur ce je vous souhaite à tous une bonne soirée!
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Modifié par lucile83 le 14-01-2015 21:26
Réponse: I shop /Correction de razzor, postée le 14-01-2015 à 21:22:33 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Voici les corrections
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Réponse: I shop /Correction de kaleid, postée le 15-01-2015 à 18:55:40 (S | E)
Bonsoir!
Tout d'abord,je tiens à vous remercier de votre aide!
Voici le texte après correction:
The document is a photomontage made by Barbara Kruger in 1987.
What I found immediately striking is the slogan "I shop therefore I am". Furthermore, when the artist use only three colours:grey for the hand,white for the sign and red for the message.Red is used for lettering in order to stand out against the white and black background.It's also a use for the viewer to be shocked ,since the colours of the message are violent and aggressive.
I think that the artist's goal is to denounce the overconsumption of the society,that is going to destroy the world.Since the consumer's society created inequality between the differents states.And this overconsumption requests a large amount of raw materials that the Earth doesn't have.As a result of the use of chemical products,that pollute our world.
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