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Message de leulie posté le 22-01-2014 à 20:04:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour!
Mon professeur d'anglais renforcé nous a donné comme devoir noté de répondre à "Would you be able to live such an adventure?" en une dizaine de lignes.
N'étant pas sûre de moi, je poste mon devoir sur ce site en espérant recevoir de l'aide qui me permettrait d'améliorer mon expression.
S'il vous plait, pouvez-vous m'indiquer les fautes et erreurs?
"Traveling world in search of aventures and novelties? It makes me dream, It makes everybody dream but it's a stereotype! Living by his own abilities in the 21th century, in our computerized and superficial society, is impossible. Besides, being an adventure means renounce to everything. Giving up his family, his friends, his life. Maybe it's due to my age, but I'm not ready to launch into unknow and mystery. Furthermore, we have to face up that everything is discovered. We are no longer at the time of major discoveries with Magellan or Christopher Columbus, the whole planet has been explored from top to bottom. So, I couldn't live away from comfort, reclusive in primitive conditions. To me, it's not interesting to leave everything for the Unknown, in a polluted and crowded planet. But, the notion of living to experience is enriching but I think it's just impossible to thrive in our Earth planet wasted of dirtiness."
Merci beaucoup de votre attention.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-01-2014 21:12
Message de leulie posté le 22-01-2014 à 20:04:27 (S | E | F)
Bonjour!
Mon professeur d'anglais renforcé nous a donné comme devoir noté de répondre à "Would you be able to live such an adventure?" en une dizaine de lignes.
N'étant pas sûre de moi, je poste mon devoir sur ce site en espérant recevoir de l'aide qui me permettrait d'améliorer mon expression.
S'il vous plait, pouvez-vous m'indiquer les fautes et erreurs?
"Traveling world in search of aventures and novelties? It makes me dream, It makes everybody dream but it's a stereotype! Living by his own abilities in the 21th century, in our computerized and superficial society, is impossible. Besides, being an adventure means renounce to everything. Giving up his family, his friends, his life. Maybe it's due to my age, but I'm not ready to launch into unknow and mystery. Furthermore, we have to face up that everything is discovered. We are no longer at the time of major discoveries with Magellan or Christopher Columbus, the whole planet has been explored from top to bottom. So, I couldn't live away from comfort, reclusive in primitive conditions. To me, it's not interesting to leave everything for the Unknown, in a polluted and crowded planet. But, the notion of living to experience is enriching but I think it's just impossible to thrive in our Earth planet wasted of dirtiness."
Merci beaucoup de votre attention.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 22-01-2014 21:12
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