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Message de so3663 posté le 17-04-2013 à 23:21:45 (S | E | F)
Hello!
Le bac de langue arrive à grand pas et donc j'aurais souhaité que l'on puisse me corriger puisque je passe à l'oral dès la rentrée.
Merci d'avance
We can see effect of progress on the society. Firstly, thanks to new technology and the internet, people can now work from their own homes and no longer need to go to their workplace (telecommuniting). Other example, in the interview “which school do you prefer: a traditional or a virtual school?” it deals with a virtual school. For the woman is a good idea because permit staying at home and learning via internet. But the man objects to saying that a traditional school is better because the students mustn’t to learn alone, it’s preferable learning with others students if not, the risk It is social isolation. This interview shows that the progress can be good or bad.
In fact, the progress has undesirable effects on the people. As addiction, fewer and fewer people can do without their smartphones, laptops, netbooks… which has an influence on their way of lie. Besides, in the interview “are social networking sites a threat to our private lives?” it raises the problem of social networks, such as facebook. A woman speaks about facebook and says that it’s a risk because people don’t understand how to protect themselves well enough. It’s dangerous for private life. She gives example, a lot of people who have lost their jobs because their boss has looked pictures and others things about them. But facebook is a good way to improve social links and to contact friends.
Moreover, the progress has permitted to improve the life with new drugs and technologies. For example, the Dr. Gregory Pincus created birth control-pill in 1951 or fighting against rabies with Pasteur’s discovery. So, all this drugs and discoveries permit to improve the health and the life of persons. But this progress can be dangerous, for example in the text studied “building a perfect baby”, the parents can choose their baby’s traits, as a catalog. Choosing eyes, size or hair. To my mind it’s a bad idea because everyone will be perfect and look alike, to wit robot. So how distance yourself? Anyway, with the progress in the science it will be probably the future. The film Gattaca illustrates this topic and adds another problem because we can see a man normal and his brother genetically modified and there is clearly disparity. And are the rich going to be able to do it so we going to create a kind of subpopulation of the “genetically perfect”.
In conclusion, the progress has a positive point and negative point. Too much progress can have harmful consequences although permit to improve the life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-04-2013 07:40
Message de so3663 posté le 17-04-2013 à 23:21:45 (S | E | F)
Hello!
Le bac de langue arrive à grand pas et donc j'aurais souhaité que l'on puisse me corriger puisque je passe à l'oral dès la rentrée.
Merci d'avance
We can see effect of progress on the society. Firstly, thanks to new technology and the internet, people can now work from their own homes and no longer need to go to their workplace (telecommuniting). Other example, in the interview “which school do you prefer: a traditional or a virtual school?” it deals with a virtual school. For the woman is a good idea because permit staying at home and learning via internet. But the man objects to saying that a traditional school is better because the students mustn’t to learn alone, it’s preferable learning with others students if not, the risk It is social isolation. This interview shows that the progress can be good or bad.
In fact, the progress has undesirable effects on the people. As addiction, fewer and fewer people can do without their smartphones, laptops, netbooks… which has an influence on their way of lie. Besides, in the interview “are social networking sites a threat to our private lives?” it raises the problem of social networks, such as facebook. A woman speaks about facebook and says that it’s a risk because people don’t understand how to protect themselves well enough. It’s dangerous for private life. She gives example, a lot of people who have lost their jobs because their boss has looked pictures and others things about them. But facebook is a good way to improve social links and to contact friends.
Moreover, the progress has permitted to improve the life with new drugs and technologies. For example, the Dr. Gregory Pincus created birth control-pill in 1951 or fighting against rabies with Pasteur’s discovery. So, all this drugs and discoveries permit to improve the health and the life of persons. But this progress can be dangerous, for example in the text studied “building a perfect baby”, the parents can choose their baby’s traits, as a catalog. Choosing eyes, size or hair. To my mind it’s a bad idea because everyone will be perfect and look alike, to wit robot. So how distance yourself? Anyway, with the progress in the science it will be probably the future. The film Gattaca illustrates this topic and adds another problem because we can see a man normal and his brother genetically modified and there is clearly disparity. And are the rich going to be able to do it so we going to create a kind of subpopulation of the “genetically perfect”.
In conclusion, the progress has a positive point and negative point. Too much progress can have harmful consequences although permit to improve the life.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 18-04-2013 07:40
Réponse: Correction/ bac oral de laure95, postée le 18-04-2013 à 10:50:46 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici ce que tu dois corriger:
We can see (the)effect (à mettre au pluriel) of progress on the society. Firstly, thanks to new technology and the internet, people can now work from their own homes (mal dit) and no longer need to go to their workplace (telecommuniting). (ajoute des mots pour introduire ton exemple) Other example, in the interview “which school do you prefer: a traditional or a virtual school?” it deals with a virtual school. For the woman (il manque le sujet de IS) is a good idea because (il faut un sujet) permit (conjugaison!)staying (permit doit être suivi de l'infinitif avec to) at home and learning (même remarque) via internet. But the man objects to (pas la bonne préposition je pense) saying that a traditional school is better because
In fact,
Moreover, the progress has permitted to improve
In conclusion, the progress has a positive point and negative point (à mettre au pluriel). Too much progress can have harmful consequences although (sujet?) permit to improve
Réponse: Correction/ bac oral de so3663, postée le 20-04-2013 à 13:06:56 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup
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