Correction/deforestation
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Message de camijaz posté le 14-04-2013 à 10:21:55 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai une vidéo de pub à faire en anglais, j'ai choisi de la faire sur la déforestation.
Serait-il possible que quelqu'un corrige mes fautes s'il vous plaît?
Merci beaucoup
The deforestation is a very important topic which affects the whole population. I have chosen this picture and this slogan because at first glance, we don’t guess that it comes to deforestation. But, it takes a little approach to see “deforestation kills”. And we understand immediately. Moreover, this picture concerns the human himself seeing that this is a neck cut, without face, as if it was a tree cut by the ax. So, the deforestation is increasingly serious in the world. The humans have need of still more paper. If there are endangered species, this is also due to deforestation. Everything is connected, one thing leads to another.
The target audience is everybody, the whole human to make them reacting because this problem concerns everybody. This debate will be never solving without the willingness of everybody. So everyone should put his own will.
The forest devastated is like the lungs of a smoker as we can see on this representative picture.
So, protect the forest and the trees before that it disappears!
Message de camijaz posté le 14-04-2013 à 10:21:55 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai une vidéo de pub à faire en anglais, j'ai choisi de la faire sur la déforestation.
Serait-il possible que quelqu'un corrige mes fautes s'il vous plaît?
Merci beaucoup
The deforestation is a very important topic which affects the whole population. I have chosen this picture and this slogan because at first glance, we don’t guess that it comes to deforestation. But, it takes a little approach to see “deforestation kills”. And we understand immediately. Moreover, this picture concerns the human himself seeing that this is a neck cut, without face, as if it was a tree cut by the ax. So, the deforestation is increasingly serious in the world. The humans have need of still more paper. If there are endangered species, this is also due to deforestation. Everything is connected, one thing leads to another.
The target audience is everybody, the whole human to make them reacting because this problem concerns everybody. This debate will be never solving without the willingness of everybody. So everyone should put his own will.
The forest devastated is like the lungs of a smoker as we can see on this representative picture.
So, protect the forest and the trees before that it disappears!
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