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Message de damien13 posté le 12-04-2010 à 13:52:52 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je dois faire une dissertation sur la carrière professionelle et l'idéalisme. Pouvez vous m'aider à corriger quelques fautes. Merci d'avance.
The idealism is current illustrating the attitude of that who acts according an ideal.
Nowadays work occupies an increasingly important place in our company. We can thus ask to us whether it’s still possible to reconcile the idealism and its career.
Initially we will see that the career and the idealism are two irreconcilable values. Then we will see that certain person to reach.
Firstly, to obtain a work with responsibilities, it’s necessary to be invested completely in its career what doesn’t leave any place with the leisure’s or a family life?
Moreover, I our work don’t bring any satisfaction to u, by its lack of interest or its repetition such as for example the assembly line works, it’s thus impossible to open out and reconcile professional life and happiness.
However, in spite of very hard rates of work sometimes it’s still possible to open out in its work and also to use its time advisedly to continue an ideal without for all this that of overflows on the career.
It’s thus possible to combine the idealism and its career indeed some professions associate the idealism it’s the case for the politicians or medical trades thanks to the humane missions.
In conclusion, the idealism doesn’t imply a total investment; each can continue its own ideal, by using its time voluntarily or by making gifts.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-04-2010 21:14
Message de damien13 posté le 12-04-2010 à 13:52:52 (S | E | F)
Bonjour
je dois faire une dissertation sur la carrière professionelle et l'idéalisme. Pouvez vous m'aider à corriger quelques fautes. Merci d'avance.
The idealism is current illustrating the attitude of that who acts according an ideal.
Nowadays work occupies an increasingly important place in our company. We can thus ask to us whether it’s still possible to reconcile the idealism and its career.
Initially we will see that the career and the idealism are two irreconcilable values. Then we will see that certain person to reach.
Firstly, to obtain a work with responsibilities, it’s necessary to be invested completely in its career what doesn’t leave any place with the leisure’s or a family life?
Moreover, I our work don’t bring any satisfaction to u, by its lack of interest or its repetition such as for example the assembly line works, it’s thus impossible to open out and reconcile professional life and happiness.
However, in spite of very hard rates of work sometimes it’s still possible to open out in its work and also to use its time advisedly to continue an ideal without for all this that of overflows on the career.
It’s thus possible to combine the idealism and its career indeed some professions associate the idealism it’s the case for the politicians or medical trades thanks to the humane missions.
In conclusion, the idealism doesn’t imply a total investment; each can continue its own ideal, by using its time voluntarily or by making gifts.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-04-2010 21:14
Réponse: Correction/career and idealism de notrepere, postée le 12-04-2010 à 18:30:04 (S | E)
Hello 
The idealism is current illustrating the attitude of that who acts according an ideal. I'm not sure what you are trying to say. Can you say it in French and perhaps we can help you come up with a better translation.
There should be no definite article ("the") before the word "idealism".
Réponse: Correction/career and idealism de damien13, postée le 12-04-2010 à 19:36:33 (S | E)
l'idéalisme est un courant illustrant l'attitude de celui qui agit en fonction d'un idéal.
Réponse: Correction/career and idealism de notrepere, postée le 12-04-2010 à 20:28:20 (S | E)
Idealism is a trend which illustrates the point of view of one who acts according to an ideal. (This is the best I can do for now...more later)
Réponse: Correction/career and idealism de notrepere, postée le 12-04-2010 à 23:41:32 (S | E)
Hello!We can thus ask to us whether it’s still possible to reconcile
to us: see Lien Internet
where you have written "its" you should use "one's" (possessive form)
"Then we will see that certain person to reach."
I don't understand this sentence. What are you trying to say?
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Modifié par notrepere le 13-04-2010 00:06
Réponse: Correction/career and idealism de damien13, postée le 13-04-2010 à 09:24:25 (S | E)
Voici ce que je veux dire en FR.
l'idéalisme est un courant illustrant l'attitude de celui qui agt en fonction d'un idéal. De nos jour, le travail occupe une place importante dans notre société.
Nous pouvons donc nous demander s'il est encore possible de concilier à l'idéalisme sa carrière professionnelle et l'idéalisme sont deux valeus inconciliables. Puis nous verrons que certaine personne y arrive.
Premierement, pour obtenir un emploi avec des responsabilités, il faut s'investir complétement dans sa carrière professionnelle ce qui ne laisse aucune place aux loisirs ou à une vie de famille.
De plus, si notre travail ne nous apporte aucune satisfaction, par son manque d'intérêt ou sa répétition comme par exemple les travaux à la chaine, il est impossible de s'épanouir et de concilier vie professionnelle et bohneur.
Cependant, malgré les cadences de travail parfois très rudes, il est encore possible de s'épanouir dans son travail et aussi d'utiliser son temps à bin escient pour poursuivre un idéal sans pour autant que celà empiète sur la carrière professionnelle.
Il est donc possible de combiner l'idéalisme et sa carrière professionnelle, en effet, certains professions associent l'idéalisme c'est le cas pour les politiciens ouencore les métiers médicaux grace aux missions humanitaires.
Pour conclure, l'idéalisme n'implique par un otal investissement, chacun peut poursuivre son propre idéal, en utilisant bénévolement son temps ou bien en faisant des dons.
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