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Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème)
Message de violet91 posté le 05-01-2008 à 19:12:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, mes amis, et bonne année à tous . Ne suivez pas forcément cet exemple..! Premier épisode.
Correction prévue le dimanche 13 Janvier !
- D'un côté,une jolie femme, à peine la trentaine, blonde, à la coupe courte très soignée,aux grands yeux bleus ,frangés de longs cils, aussi candides que ceux d'un enfant. Toujours vêtue coquettement et plutôt sagement. Toute simple, elle avait quitté sa campagne natale pour rejoindre la grande ville la plus proche et y avait aussitôt trouvé un emploi de secrétaire qu'elle occupait avec zèle. Aimable, d'humeur toujours égale, elle était l'amie de tous ..et surtout des hommes qui la convoitaient ! Mais, elle n'en faisait aucun cas , sage comme une image , car elle rêvait du mari parfait.
Telle était Marion.
- De l'autre, un très bel homme, plus mûr, sportif et élégant, dont la chevelure brune et épaisse se séparait en une raie parfaite. Ses yeux étaient irrésistibles , plus ténébreux que la nuit profonde. Son sourire éclatant creusait ses joues de deux charmantes fossettes. Il usaitde tout cela pour séduire autant de femmes qu'il le pouvait - de préférence, les soi-disant inaccessibles- alors qu'il était marié depuis quatre ans et demi avec la plus parfaite des épouses. Il manquait d'ambition et ne cherchait pas mieux que ce petit boulot dans une épicerie, maugréant sans cesse contre ses maigres revenus.
Tel était Sam.
N'y eût-il eu ce vendredi 13 et ces amis communs, ils n'auraient jamais été invités à la même soirée anti-superstition.. et elle ne l'aurait pas aimé " à la vie, à la mort ", dès le premier regard !
.D'après une grande oeuvre ( Shush !) d'un homme qui n'en sut jamais trop. A vos plumes courageuses, maintenant.
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Modifié par bridg le 06-01-2008 14:09
4 je pense même
Message de violet91 posté le 05-01-2008 à 19:12:06 (S | E | F)
Bonjour, mes amis, et bonne année à tous . Ne suivez pas forcément cet exemple..! Premier épisode. Correction prévue le dimanche 13 Janvier !
- D'un côté,une jolie femme, à peine la trentaine, blonde, à la coupe courte très soignée,aux grands yeux bleus ,frangés de longs cils, aussi candides que ceux d'un enfant. Toujours vêtue coquettement et plutôt sagement. Toute simple, elle avait quitté sa campagne natale pour rejoindre la grande ville la plus proche et y avait aussitôt trouvé un emploi de secrétaire qu'elle occupait avec zèle. Aimable, d'humeur toujours égale, elle était l'amie de tous ..et surtout des hommes qui la convoitaient ! Mais, elle n'en faisait aucun cas , sage comme une image , car elle rêvait du mari parfait.
Telle était Marion.
- De l'autre, un très bel homme, plus mûr, sportif et élégant, dont la chevelure brune et épaisse se séparait en une raie parfaite. Ses yeux étaient irrésistibles , plus ténébreux que la nuit profonde. Son sourire éclatant creusait ses joues de deux charmantes fossettes. Il usaitde tout cela pour séduire autant de femmes qu'il le pouvait - de préférence, les soi-disant inaccessibles- alors qu'il était marié depuis quatre ans et demi avec la plus parfaite des épouses. Il manquait d'ambition et ne cherchait pas mieux que ce petit boulot dans une épicerie, maugréant sans cesse contre ses maigres revenus.
Tel était Sam.
N'y eût-il eu ce vendredi 13 et ces amis communs, ils n'auraient jamais été invités à la même soirée anti-superstition.. et elle ne l'aurait pas aimé " à la vie, à la mort ", dès le premier regard !
.D'après une grande oeuvre ( Shush !) d'un homme qui n'en sut jamais trop. A vos plumes courageuses, maintenant.
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je pense même Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de lucile83, postée le 06-01-2008 à 14:06:58 (S | E)
Hello dear !
I don't hesitate any longer ! wowwww ;you're worse than that wonderful Betty
On one side a pretty woman, in her early thirties, fair-haired, in a smart short hair cut, with long lashes bordering her wide blue eyes as ingenuous as a child’s. Always fashionable and rather wisely dressed. Quite unpretentious she had left her native countryside to come close to the nearest big city where she had at once found a secretary job she was zealously holding down. Kind, always even tempered, she was everybody’s friend…especially men’s lusting after her ! But she did not think much of them, good as gold for she was dreaming of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and smart, whose brown and thick hair was separated by a perfect part. His irresistible eyes were darker than a deep night. His blazing smile sucked in into two nice dimples. He did use all that in order to charm as many women as he could – in preference the so called unapproachable ones- whereas he had been married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife. He was lacking of ambition and did not look for anything better than that minor job in a grocery store, continuously grousing against his meager income.
Such was Sam.
Had there not been that Friday 13th and those common friends, they would never have been invited together to that anti-superstition party and she would not have loved him “to life and to death” at the first glance !
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de bridg, postée le 06-01-2008 à 15:44:15 (S | E)
Hello
Je vous l'avais promis, je l'ai fait, mais c'est un niveau largement supérieur au mien.
On one hand, an attractive woman, hardly around thirties, very well-kept short fair haired, wide-eyed blue, fringed by long lashes, as naive as a child's. She used to be coquettishly dressed and rather wisely. Quite natural she had left her native country to join the closest big city and had immediately found a job as secretary over there in which she was diligent. Pleasant, always good tempered, she was everybody's friend… especially the male sex lusting after her! But she thought nothing of them because she dreamed about the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and chic, whose brown and thick hair was perfectly parted. His eyes were irresistible, darker than a deep night. His glowing smile grooved his cheeks in two charming dimples. He skilled in the use of all that in order to captivate as many women as he could –rather, the so-called inaccessible- while he had been married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife. He was lacking of ambition and did not look for a better stead than this small job in a grocery shop, grumbling ceaselessly against his lean incomes.
Such was Sam.
Without that Friday 13th and those mutual friends, they never would have been invited at the same party ' anti-superstition' and she wouldn't have loved him "to life and to death"
Quelqu'un at-il un tube d'aspirine??
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de woodyrun, postée le 07-01-2008 à 07:37:07 (S | E)
Happy New year Violet91 !
On the one hand,a pretty woman,in her late twenties, fair-haired, with a short and very neat hair cut, wide blue eyes bordered with long lashes and as ingenious as a child's. Always smartly and rather wisely dressed. Quite simple, she had left her native countryside to join up the nearest big city and had at once found a secretary job which she zealously filled. Kind,always evenly tempered, she was everybody's friend... and mostly men's who were lusting after her.
But, she didn't care at all, for, as good as gold, she was dreaming about the perfect husband.
Such was marion.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, more mature, athletic and smart, whose thick and brown hair was perfectly parted. His eyes were irresistible,darker than a deep night.His glowing smile was creating two charming dimples in his cheeks.He was using all that to charm as many women as he could, preferably the so-called unapproachable ones, whereas he has been married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife. Il was lacking ambition and was not looking for something better than this insignificant job in a grocery store, always grumbling about his meager income.
Such was Sam.
Had there not been that Friday the 13th and those mutual friends, they would never have been invited to the same anti-superstition party... and she wouldn't have loved him 'to life and to death' at first sight !
That was great indeed !... maintenant, j'ai bien besoin d'un café !-------------------
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Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de TravisKidd, postée le 07-01-2008 à 16:39:38 (S | E)
- On one side, a pretty woman, barely in her thirties, blonde, with a meticulous short haircut and big blue eyes under long lashes as obvious as a baby's. Always dressed fashionably and rather smartly. Quite a simple woman, she had left her native countryside to be closer to the nearest big city and immediately found a job as a secretary, which she performed with zeal. Likable, always in a fair mood, she was everyone's friend ... especially her suitors'! But she didn't let anything come of them, wise as an image
, for she dreamt of the perfect husband.Such was Marion.
- On the other, a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and elegant, whose thick brown head of hair was parted in a perfect line. His eyes were irresistable, darker than midnight. His dazzling smile sucked in two charming dimples. He used all of this to charm as many women as he could -- preferably the so-called hard-to-get ones -- while he had been married for four-and-a-half years to the most perfect of wives. He lacked ambition and aspired for nothing better than this little job in a grocery store, grousing non-stop about his meager pay.
Such was Sam.
Had there not been that Friday the 13th and those friends in common, they would never have been invited to the same anti-superstition party, and she would not have loved him "in life and death", at first sight!
Sam and Marion sittin' in a tree,
K-I-S-S-I-N-G!
First comes love,
then comes marriage,
then comes baby in a baby carriage!
violetRéponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de olisan, postée le 07-01-2008 à 16:54:25 (S | E)
Bonjour violet91
déjà qu'avec des exercices deux étoiles j'accumule en gran dnombre les fautes...dans celui-ci j'ose pas imagniner... Bon comme il y a longtemps que je ne vais plus en classe je ne risque pas d'être la risée de la classe alors...In a way, a pretty woman, hardly about thirty years olds, blonde, with short hair styled with care, with blues large eyes, fringe long eyelashes, as ingenuous as child. Always to be well diessed, particular about one's appearance and wisely. Just she had left her native country for to join the nearly big city and she had found quickly a secretary employment, where she worked zealously. Pleasant, bad-tempered, she was the friend to everybody and especially of mens, who coveted her. But she did not take no notice of as good as gold, because she dreamt a perfect husband.
That way was Marion.
On the other hand, a vey handsome man, mature, sporty and smart, whose the brown and thick hair with a perfect parting. His eyes were irresistible, more handome stranger that the deep night.His dazzling smile had hollowed his cheeks with two charming dimples. He used one's influence it for to charm as much women what he could preferably self-styled unapproachable even though was married since four hal yers with the more perfect wife. He lacked ambition and did not found no better that little job in a grocery, grumbling continually against his scant ressources.
That way was Sam.
If there have not this thirteen friday and the same friends, they have never been guest in the same evening against superstition, and she will have never loving for the life ans the dead.
Quand même pour cet exercice...Comme je disais précédemment il faut parfois oser...Bonne soirée
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de apau, postée le 07-01-2008 à 17:51:01 (S | E)
Violet,My best wishes for you and your family.
- On one side a pretty woman, barely in her thirties, fair-haired, in a very smart short hair cut, with long lashes bordering her blue eyes as ingenuous as a child. Always fashionable and rather dressed. Quite a simple woman, she had left her native countryside to come the nearest big city and immediately found a secretary job .... (help I don't know !!!) with great satisfaction for her boss. Kind, always same mood, she was everybody's friend... especially men's looking after her... But she didn't think of them because she was dreaming of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
- On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, athletic and smart, whose brown and thick hair was separated by a perfect part. His eyes were irresistible, darker than a deep night. His blazing smile sucked in two nice dimples. He did use all that to charm as many women as he could - in preference the unreachable ones - whereas he had married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife. He was lacking of ambition and didn't look for anything better than that minor job in a grocery-store, grumbling continuously against his meager incomes.
Such was Sam.
Without this marvelous friday 13th and those mutual friends, they would never have been invited together to the same party " anti-superstition " and she would not have loved him " to life and to death " at the first look.
Thank you Violet but my Goodness so hard !!!!
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de gee, postée le 07-01-2008 à 23:11:04 (S | E)
Oooh Violet,
Gifted poet,
Your high-end French writing
Is amazing.
And I had a wild time.
Wild? Say, prime!
- On one side, a pretty woman, nearly thirty, blonde, neat close cropped hair, wide blue eyes fringed with long lashes, as ingenuous as child’s. Always smartly dressed up, say, properly. Very simple, she had left her native countryside to join the nearest big city and had at once been hired as a secretary, a job that she was holding zealously. Kind, even-tempered, she was everyone’s friend… especially male’s lusting after her. But she did not care about them, as good as gold, for she dreamt of a perfect husband.
So was Marion.
- On the other side, a very handsome man, rather middle-aged, athletic and smart, whose brown thick hair was straight parted. His eyes were irresistible, more dark than a deep night. His bright smile was digging two nice dimples into his cheeks. Of all that he made use to win as many females as he can over – preferably the so-called inaccessible – whereas he had been married four and a half year long to the most perfect spouse. He had no job pretensions and didn’t look up beyond that casual work in a grocer’s shop, keeping grumbling at his pittance.
So was Sam.
Hadn’t it been that Friday the Thirteen and that mutual friends, they would never have been both invited to the very same anti-superstition party… and she would not have loved him, at first glance, to her dying day.
Looking forward to what’s happening to the black underwear of our innocent young thing.
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 07-01-2008 à 23:41:27 (S | E)
ever so much, dear gee, for your little poem and congratulations. Men are all the same ,then..Not to hurry !Wait till the last episode to know more about the black bra ..and keep thrilled through the three next ones !! Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de TravisKidd, postée le 08-01-2008 à 01:02:35 (S | E)
Can't a man and a woman fall in love anymore without something happening to their underwear??? You should be ashamed of your impure thoughts!!!
So ... what happens to the underwear??
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Modifié par TravisKidd le 08-01-2008 01:05
I just saw that "dessous" can mean "underwear"! So I suppose there is a justification for your dirty mind.
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de pepe69, postée le 08-01-2008 à 10:22:37 (S | E)
Bonjour violet91,
One of them, a pretty woman, nearly thirty, fair-haired, with a short and very well-groomed hair, wide blue eyes fringed with long eyelashes, as naïve as a child's. Always stylishly and rather wisely dressed. Quite modest, she had left her native countryside to go to the nearest city where she had immediately found a secratary job which she fulfilled with zeal. Kind, even-tempered, she was everyone's friend.....particularly her sycophants! But, she never paid any attention to them, as good as gold, because she was dreaming of a perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
The other, a very good-looking man, maturer, athletic and elegant, whose thick and dark hair was separated by a perfect parting. His irresistible eyes were darker than a deep night. His sparkling smile made his cheeks with two charming dimples. He took advantage of all that in order to charm as many women as he could, preferably the so-called inacessible ones, even though he had been married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife. He was lacking of ambition and not looking for better than this casual job in a grocery, incessantly complaining against his meagre income.
Such was Sam.
Without this Friday 13th and those common friends, they would never have been invited to the same anti-superstition party.....and she wouldn't have loved him for life, at the first glance!
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 08-01-2008 à 15:08:25 (S | E)
Stop ! Stop! Le titre est ,bien sûr ,à double sens ! Il faut donner dans la dentelle et la métaphore !! Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de olisan, postée le 09-01-2008 à 10:18:00 (S | E)
Hello Violet91,
Comme demandé, j'ai corrigé mon premier devoir et j'espère cette fois-ci quitter mon bonnet d'âne
Voici donc ma deuxième version
On the one hand a pretty woman hardly about thirty with short hair styled with care, with the large fringed blue eyes of long lashes as ingenuous as those of a child. Always dressed in rather wisely and attractively. Just she had left her native country for to get to the nearly big city and she had found quickly a secretary employment, where she worked zealously. Pleasant, even-tempered, she was the friend all everybody especially of men, who coveted her. But she not did nothing case as good as gold, because she had a dream about a perfect husband.
That way was Marion.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, more mature, sporty and smart, with the brown and thick a perfect parting. His eyes were irresistible, more mysterious that the deep night. His dazzling smile has hollowed his cheeks with two charming dimples. He used his influence for to charm as many women what he could preferably alleged unapproachable even though he married since four years and half with the most perfect wife. He lacked ambition and he not found a better that little job in a grocery, grumbling continually against his scant resources
That way was Sam.
If there not had this thirteen Friday and the same friends, they will not have never been invited in the same evening against superstition, and she will not falling in love for better for worse as of the first glance.
Le tube d'aspirine est vide...
Bonne journée et encore merci
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Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de nick27, postée le 09-01-2008 à 11:29:16 (S | E)
Hello !
- On one side, a pretty woman, around her thirties, blonde with short neat hair, big blue eyes with long eyelashes as ingenuous as kid's ones. Always dressed up and quite normally. She had simply left her countryside where she was born to move closer to the nearest big city and had immediately found a job as a secretary that she performed with zeal. Friendly and always in a good-mood, she was everyon's friend.. and especially the friend of the men that wanted to date her ! But she didn't really care about it, as good as gold, because she dreamed of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
- On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and elegant whose brown and thick hair was divided by a perfect line. He had irresestible eyes, darker than midnight. His bright smile made two charming dimples appear on his cheeks. He used all these things to seduce as many women as he could - with a preference for the so caled hard to get ones while he had been married to the most perfect wife for four years and a half. He lacked of ambition and didn't look for anything better than his little job in a grocery store and always complaining about his low incomes.
Such was Sam.
If there hadn't been this Friday 13 and their common friends, they wouldn't have been invited to the same anti-superstition party.. and she wouldn't have loved him for better or for worse since the first sight !
Very interesting story ! Thanks for sharing
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de marie11, postée le 09-01-2008 à 15:57:45 (S | E)
Bonjour violet 91
On one hand, there was an attractive woman, only just about thirty with very short fair hair that was neatly trimmed. Her big blue eyes were fringed with long eyelashes and gave her an ingenuous child's look.
She was always smartly and rather simply clad.
Unaffected, she had left her native countryside to go to the nearest big town and she straight off found there a secretarial job that she held zealously.
Kind, always even-tempered, she was friendly with everybody and particularly with men who lusted after her.
But,as good as gold, she paid scant attention to them because she was dreaming of the perfect husband.
So was Marion.
On the other hand, there was a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and elegant whose thick brown hair was divided by a perfect parting. His jet-black eyes were irresistible and darker than a pitch-black night.His dazzling smile adorned his cheeks with two ravishing dimples.
He used all that to charm as many women as he could - preferably the so-called ones out of reach- although it was four years and a half since he was married with the most perfect wife. He had a lack of ambition and he didn't try to find something better than his small job in a grocery, keeping grumbling at his scanty income.
If there hadn't been that anti-superstition Friday the 13th and those common friends they would never have been invited to the same party....... She wouldn't have vowed her undying love to him at first sight.
So was Sam.
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de maya92, postée le 09-01-2008 à 19:27:27 (S | E)
Ingenue in black undies..(Teaser in other words ..)
On one side a pretty woman in her early thirties, fair hair neatly cut, big blue eyes fringed with long eyelashes, ingenuous as a child's. Always stylishly and rather properly dressed. Quite unaffected, she had left her native country to get to the nearest big city and there had straight away found a job as a secretary that she held heartily. Kind and even-tempered, she was friendly towards everyone mostly to the men who wanted to pick her up ! But she never paid any attention , good as gold, for she was dreaming of a perfect husband (inaccessible dream...poor little thing)
Such was Marion
On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, athletic and smart, whose thick brown hair had a perfect parting. His irresistible eyes were darker than the deeper night. His radiant smile sank in two charming dimples. He used all that to charm as many women as he could, preferably the so-called unyielding ones. He had been married for four years and a half with the most perfect wife.
He lacked ambition and was not looking for anything else but that casual job
in a grocery and was always grumbling at his poor income.
Such was Sam
Had there not been that anti-superstition Friday 13 party and those mutual friends, they would never have been invited to the same place..and she would not have fallen in love with him 'to dying day' at first glance.
thank you dear violet (after Bobby and Betty another schmaltzy story we are longing to know the end !)
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 09-01-2008 à 21:27:04 (S | E)
Oh! No! no! maya..What do you think of me ? Even if I actually enjoyed meeting Bobby and his doves..This story is not the same "stuff !" wait and see !"
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Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de aimen7, postée le 11-01-2008 à 13:57:31 (S | E)
Hello violet
On one side a pretty woman, hardly in her thirties, blond with a neat haircut, her eyes wide and blue with long eyelashes, as innocent as those of a child.
Always dressed fashionably and rather moderately. Rather humble, she had left her native country to reach the nearest big town where she had quickly found a job as a secretary that she held down with passion. Kind, even-tempered, she was the friend of everyone and especially of the men who wanted her! But good as gold she didn't think much of them, because she was dreaming of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
On the other side, a very smart man, more mature, athletic and handsome, whose thick brown hair disjoined in a perfect parting.
He had fascinating eyes, darker than the deep night. His dazzling smile made appear two charming dimples. He used all of these devices to seduce as many women as he could - in preference, the supposedly unapproachable ones - while he had been married for four years and a half to the most perfect of the wives. He lacked ambition and wasn't looking for anything better than this little job in a grocery, always grousing against his modest salary.
Such was Sam.
If there hadn't been that friday 13th and those common friends, they would never have been invited to that same anti-superstition party.. and she wouldn't have loved him " to life, to death ", from the first glance !
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de alice, postée le 11-01-2008 à 17:28:47 (S | E)
Hello Violet,
Tu risques d'être très déçue par le bébé dont j'ai accouché avec beaucoup de difficultés.
On the one hand, a pretty woman, hardly thirty, fair-haired with a short very neat cutting, wide blue eyes fringed with long eyelashes, as ingenuous as a child's ones. Always smartly and quiete properly dressed. Very plain, she had left her native country to join the nearest big town and had immediatly found there a job of secretary which she had with zeal. Nice even-tempered, she was the friend of everybody... particulary of the men who lusted after her. But she attached no importance to them.
That was the way Marion was.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, more mature, athletic and smart, whose the dark and thick hair separates to draw a perfect line. His eyes were compelling, more mysterious than the black night. His dazzling smile formed two charming dimples on his cheek. He used that to charm as many women as possible in preference the so-called inacessible so he has been married for four years a half with the most perfect wife. He lacked ambition and contented himself with this cassual job in a grocery and was always grousing about his small income.
That was the way Sam was.
Without this friday the thirteenth and these commun friends, they would have never been invited for the same party against the superstition and she wouldn't have loved him for life ant first glance.
Ouf! Et tout ça pour, peut-être, un ZERO!
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de coferam, postée le 11-01-2008 à 18:00:47 (S | E)
Hello Violet91,
On one side, a nice woman, only just thirties, blond, in a wise short hair cut, and long lashes bordering her wide blue eyes as ingenuous as a child’s lashes. Always dressed stylishly and rather wisely. Quite simple, she had left her native countryside to join the nearest big town, and there had soon found a job as secretary she held down with zeal. Amiable, always in the good mood, she was everybody's friend.. and mostly men who wanted her! But she did pay attention to any of them, wise as an image, because she was dreaming of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, sportive and smart,with a brown-haired and thick hair separated in a perfect parting. His eyes were overwhelming, darker than the deep of the night. His dazzling smile dejected his cheeks of two charming dimples. He employed all this to seduce as many women as he could -Preferably,the so-called inaccessible- Whereas he was married for four and a half years with the most perfect wives.He lacked ambition and don't attempt better than the small job in a grocery store, constantly grumbling against their meagre incomes.
Such was Sam.
Without that Friday 13th and those common friends, they would never have been invited to the same anti-superstition evening... And she would not have loved him"to life and to death," at the first glance!
Ce n'était pas facile...Mais si tu passes autant de temps que moi pour la correction fais-toi payer en heure supplémentaire !
Merci pour ce 3 *
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violette19, postée le 12-01-2008 à 23:12:53 (S | E)
Désolée, Violet, de ce retard dû à un internet inaccessible !
On one hand, a pretty woman, hardly thirty years old, fair- haired, very neat-haircutted, large blue- eyed fringed with long eyelashes,as ingenuous as child's ones . Always smartly dressed ,rather soberly . Quite simple,she had left her native country to rejoin the neariest big city, there she had at once found a secretary job that she was doing zealously. Kind,always even-mooded,
she was every one's friend..almost of men desiring her! But,good as gold, she didn't mind those ones for she was dreaming of the perfect husband .
Such was Marion .
On the other hand,a very handsome man,more mature,keen on sports and smart,whose brown thick hair was perfectly parting . His eyes were irresistible,darker than the deep night . His sparkling smile was hollowing his cheeks in two charming dimples . He used all that to seduce as many women as he could -specially those so-called out of reach- although being married for four years and a half with the most perfect of women .He lacked ambition and was not looking for better than that little job in a grocer's shop,while continuously grumbling at his poor income .
Such was Sam.
Had not been that Friday 13th and their mutual friends,they would never have been invited to the same anti-superstition party .. and she never had loved him "to life and death", at the first glance !
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 13-01-2008 à 14:48:39 (S | E)
à vous tous qui n'avez sans doute pas résisté à mon titre "racoleur"! Les zélés de dernière minute avaient encore de quoi se nourrir ! Merci donc d'être de plus en plus nombreux à vous "arracher les cheveux" et vous mettre à table !Traductions (les vôtres ) : quatre étoiles ,pour la plupart !
. et vous n'en êtes qu'au début..---Pour les non-francophones ou "les innocents aux mains pleines"
,une "oie blanche" est une jeune femme candide,innocente,qui ne se méfie pas de certaines ruses (masculines ,évidemment !).C'est une expression idiomatique ,donc impossible à traduire telle quelle. Et des "dessous"..sont des sous-vêtements. Donc une" oie blanche " devrait avoir des dessous de blancheur quasi-virginale ! C'est un attelage linguistique ,fait pour attirer l'oeil.(et cela a marché!)--on one side...on the other side =on (the) one hand..on the other hand ( ou one)
-- in her thirties .Un peu plus : in her early thirties # in her late thirties (les dernières) ."la soixantaine lourdement entamée " comme a dit C. Deneuve.
--fair-haired :blond "naturel" (adj.composé):blond(e):convient ici,car vous verrez la suite .symbole plus "glamour" et cliché.Il ne faut pas oublier le duel "blanc/noir";
--to do one's hair :se coiffer.To comb("b" muet"):se peigner.to brush:se brosser . To groom :s'apprêter (to groom a horse.;and" here comes the bride, big ,fat and wide . .here comes the groom as thin as a broom !"(le jeune marié).(cela s'appelle avoir des connaissances! A chanter sur Mendelsshon)).
to trim :avoir une coupe bien soignée.(sur les bords!).
--To part : se séparer.To be parted :être séparé .a parting :une raie.
--ingenuous eyes as those of a child (cplt de nom)=as a child's (ones):génitif générique.La candeur du regard d'enfant .
--simple ( sans complication),plain( clear,unsophisticated),modest (not rich or not proud),humble. Il s'agissait de sa forme d'esprit :elle ne voyait pas le mal.
--properly : correctement pas provocante)wisely, decently # appealing,sexy.
---a city =a town with a business centre.
---to work as...
---To hold ,to hold down, to perform zealously.
---Nice est un adj."bouche-trou". Sur-employé/tout peut être nice ,quand c'est nice: votre personne,votre conjoint,votre jardin,votre soupe,vos pieds !..Un "laideron"(ça,c'est vraiment méchant"..pardon me!)peut être "nice" .
--Pleasant renvoie plus à la sympathie. "de commerce agréable".
---kind: gentille ,brave,serviable..
---in good mood (moon.:lunatique ou pas )si good,ily a des "bad" .Elle est d'humeur égale: donc even-tempered.
---to want = to lust (désir )"I want you,I want you, I waaaaant youuuu!That's all I want to say !"(The Beatles)" # to want veut aussi dire :vouloir très fort,manquer de ,avoir besoin (= to need)"All you need is love ,love is all you need"(The Beatles !)."This tea still wants sugar".
---Not to take notice,not to pay attention to,not to care (a fig!): ne pas en faire cas;s'en soucier comme de l'an quarante (A.D les gens croyaient en l' Apocalyse..qui n'arriva pas ..d'où l'expression)
---beauté masculine : handsome(= pretty). good-looking(mixte).Attractive : séduisant .Il peut être "handsome" et ne rien "dégager".Il peut être quelconque et très "attractive". Question de charme et de goût. Pensez à certains hommes célèbres et leurs belles conquêtes :S.Gainsbourg,Woody Allen,Mocky..Reste prudente violet: ces hommes-là ont un talent indéniable.
---idiomatic :sage comme une image : as good as gold.
---Quatre ans et demi :durée écoulée ="for" + tps composé:present perfect continuous ou past p.cont.(si forme active+ing ) si forme passive+P.Passé .
---Telle était.:So was;such was ;this way was;this was the way Marion was.Such was peut rendre directement tout ce qui fait la personne. So was Marion (quoique juste)est ambigu :Marion aussi.
---Le "brun" n'est pas le même pour tout le monde:brown-haired :un beau châtain? "brown:couleur brune ,c'est vrai (peinture).Dark: brun sombre toujours le duel noir/blanc.
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Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de TravisKidd, postée le 13-01-2008 à 15:19:41 (S | E)
Merci pour ces explications, mais ... j'aimerais bien voir la version "correcte" !!!
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de johannes, postée le 13-01-2008 à 16:21:07 (S | E)
hello dear Violet,
here is my theme, sent here from my bed ;-)
looking forward to your answer !
On the one hand, a pretty fair-haired woman, barely in her thirties, with a very tide short hair-cut and blue eyes fringed with long lashes, as guileless as those of a child. Always coquettishly dressed, still rather discreetly.All unpretentious, she had left her native country(side) to go up to the closest big town and immediately found there a job as a secretary that she filled zealously.Nice and always even-tempered, she was a friend for everyone...mostly for the men who kept lusting after her.
She nevertheless set little value on it for she was as good as gold and dreaming of the perfect husband.
Such was Marion.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, maturer, athletic and elegant, whose brown thick hair was perfectly parted.His eyes, darker than the deep night, were fascinating. His bursting smile let two lovely dimples appear on his cheeks. He used it all to seduce as many women as he could, preferably to so-called un-get-at-able, while he was/had been (?quelle forme choisir) married for four years and a half to the most perfect wife.He lacked ambition and was not looking for a better position than that job in a grocery, unceasingly grumbling at his little income.
Such was Sam.
Had it not been that friday 13 and those mutual friends, they would not have ever been to the same "anti-superstition" party...and she would not have loved him "???" at the first sight.
Quite difficult, this one, er ?
Good work, sweet Violet !
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Modifié par bridg le 14-01-2008 00:14
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 13-01-2008 à 16:38:53 (S | E)
Suite n°2 pour une oie blanche.
---Nous disions "brun,brun". Un beau brun (cliché ,aussi) . Brun foncé,donc pour aller avec la platine ! Le couple est formé. Une "Grace Kelly" avec un "Cary Grant".,par exemple.
---la hiérarchie des adj;descriptifs anglais a été très bien expliquée par marie11 sur "bloodless shadow";plus c'est loin du nom,plus c'est subjectif,plus cela en est proche ,plus c'est une "vérité" pour tous.
EX: Two very nice medium-height short brown-haired blue-eyed French female moderators!(and I bet one of them is brown-eyed!)
---un sourire "sparkling" (bon dentifrice)"dazzling":il vous faut presque des lunettes de soleil. Mais ,il y a un grand choix..
---une fossette : a dimple .une ravissante fossette : a lovely dimple,a cute dimple (plus pour un enfant et US).
---Creuser,façonner :to dig,to make,to form,to suck in,to hollow."A chacun sa vérité". L'essentiel est de ne pas pouvoir y résister.
---to seduce : charmer, donc obtenir ce que l'on veut.Ici,"la chute des femmes"! To entice penche sur le leurre. To charm n'est pas forcément conscient.
---Concession( gram.):bien que ,quoique (pas malgré que même si certains médias..): whereas, although,even though,though ..
---To lack : manquer de : transitif.He lacked ambition.# to want# to need# to miss (regret).Verbe ponctuel et constat. pas de be+ing.
---To look for, to attempt .
---a casual job :un "boulot" tout ordinaire. A small job. Pas little (il n'y tient pas ).
---to be contented with : se satisfaire de.
---low income. short wages. Low salary. cela dépend de celui ou de la société qui paie.les "income" taxes ...sont les impôts sur le revenu! Merci aux " taxers" !!!
---Il fallait bien ré-injecter comme on dit si mochement une tournure stylistique compliquée et déjà vue ..pour plaire à maya92. Subj.non périphrastique: "n'y eût-il eu...." hadn't there been. Les plus ..,les moins.. d'entre vous.ont zappé en écrasant ma belle formule :without. c'est mâlin!
---"Till death us do part" "jusqu'à ce que la mort nous sépare". Il faut que les deux soient impliqués. "To life and to death"(eux deux ou elle seule). Her "dying day" est joli.Mais il faudra voir avec la suite..
--- At first sight: dès qu'il est apparu devant elle. At (the) first glance (elle est donc coquine!): elle a choisi de le regarder (malheur!!)."As you like it", anyway.
---j'ai oublié consciemment ou non :"elle rêvait du mari parfait": ses pensées vagabondaient ,donc be+ing. To dream of : précis (elle sait ce qu'elle veut). To dream about (vague): rêvasser ,songer.
Un peu de culture et de grammaire !
Admiral Nelson a donné sa vie pour l'Angleterre au large du Cape Trafalgar on October 21st 1805 au large de "Cadiz" . Sa "fleet" a vaincu les French and Spanish ones. C'est une balle française qui l'a touché mortellement.(Napoleon's enemy).Il a eu le temps de faire une résultative on the "Victory" (she-ship) : "My backbone is shot through"! De faire une prière et d 'utiliser un present perfect de bilan (de toute une vie) "I've done my duty"!pour traviskidd.
Heureusement que sa peine s'est arrêtée là : car..j'y arrive..il était déjà "one-eyed" et "one- armed" . Manquait plus qu'il soit "one-legged" ou autre.
Adj.composés donc:
1 ) A partir d'un verbe : good-looking;breath-taking.;(ing)
2) """""""""""""""""""""au p.passé: panic-stricken..
3) D'un nom : quick-tempered, even-tempered, bad-tempered, quick-witted,ink-blotted, dark-haired, blue-eyed, bare-footed (pieds nus), broad-shouldered, ,a three-storeyed house (storied US),narrow-minded..a white-skinned swimmer..Vous avez compris.
Le trait d'union a tendance à tomber aux US.
Et,pour finir : qui mange qui ?
---A man eating crocodile or a man-eating crocodile---(et oui,pepe,le trait d'union a parfois une importance capitale !)
d'avoir retenu votre souffle et de patienter pour ma proposition !Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 13-01-2008 à 17:56:58 (S | E)
de comprendre qu'une traduction ne tombe pas du ciel.Il faut expliquer le processus, pour qu'il y ait progrés ou confirmation,traviskidd Beaucoup m'ont dit "avoir souffert". D'autre part, je propose la mienne, sans avoir la prétention de donner un modèle." J'arrrriive",donc .
" Sweet lamb in black underwear*."
--- On one side, a pretty woman, in her fresh thirties, blonde, with short and neatly trimmed hair . Her wide blue eyes were enhanced by a fringe of long eyelashes and as ingenuous as a child's. Always dressed in the fashion, she didn't aim to be particularly appealing. Quite simple , she had left her native countryside to go and settle down in the nearest big city where she had soon found a job as a secretary which she performed zealously. Pleasant, always even-tempered, she was everyone's friend ..especially males' lusting after her. Actually, she could not care less , since she was dreaming of the perfect husband*.
Such was Marion.
On the other side, a very handsome man, more mature, athletic and smart, whose thick dark hair divided in a very neat parting . His irresistible eyes were darker velvet than the deep night. His gorgeous(dazzling) smile hollowed two lovely dimples in his cheeks.. He perfectly knew how to use all that to seduce as many women as he could..mostly the so- called inaccessible ones , even though he had been married to the most perfect wife for four years and a half. He lacked ambition, contented with his casual job in a grocery store, yet constantly grumbling at his low income.
Such was Sam.
Hadn't there been that Friday 13th (the thirteenth) and those mutual friends, they never would have been invited to the same anti-superstition party...and she would not have fallen in love " for life and to death" at first sight.
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*A husband : pour ceux qui l'ignorent et sont curieux de la langue , a une histoire intéressante . Cela vient étonnamment de "house-bound" :celui qui est lié, attaché à la maison !..
"Qui va piano,va sano ". No ?
Encore grand merci de tous vos beaux essais réussis. Il y a quatre épisodes...et la "porte secrète au fond du jardin" est restée ouverte...
A très bientôt.
* Underwear =uncountable..in the beginning. Undergarments :countable..and informally : undies. "Sweet lamb in black undies",I shall say.
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Modifié par violet91 le 24-01-2008 13:44
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de lucile83, postée le 13-01-2008 à 18:56:25 (S | E)
violet ! c'est ...magistral Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de apau, postée le 13-01-2008 à 19:29:47 (S | E)
Dear Violet,
Great many thanks for your correction, translation and advice.
See you very soon dear.
Big hugs.
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de gee, postée le 13-01-2008 à 21:50:03 (S | E)
Dear Violet,
I am edified by the well-informed language information tips that back up your own descriptive discourse.
It's a pleasure to border a cultural background that is beyond me.
I had mistaken you in the beginning, thinking the text you handed over was your French translation of an English writer. So much the better. A rainbow needs mysterious hazy skies to show up.
Now we are all awaiting the moment the door at the far end of your secretive world lets new scents through.
Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de violet91, postée le 13-01-2008 à 21:57:54 (S | E)
dear gee... just know I am a perfectionist, I love writing in both languages ..and I want to make you all eager to know the following. I also am a hard-worker when correcting. See you !... love from violet Réponse: Oie blanche,dessous noirs.(thème) de nefertiti, postée le 15-01-2008 à 15:00:45 (S | E)
Hello, I am late but I have worked on it to hard to not write my answer
On one hand, a beautiful woman, who is barely around thirthy, with blond hairs and a very well groomed short cut, large blue eyes, fringed by long lashes, as blunt as a child. Always dressed smartly and rather wisely. Very simple, she had left her native countryside to link up the nearest big city and she had found immediatly a job of secretary whose she has done with zeal. Amiable, always with the same mood, she was the friend of everyone... and particularly of the men who were lusting for her. But, she did not pay attention about that, sage like a picture, because she dreamt of the perfect husband.
On the other hand, a very handsome man, more mature, sporstman and smart, whose brown deep hairs were splited in a perfect parting.His eyes were irresistible, more dark than the deep night. His brightening smile digged his cheecks with two lovely dimples. He used all of that to attract so many women he could - by preference, self-styled inaccessible - as he had been married for four years and a half with the most perfect bride. He missed ambition and did not look better than this little job in a grocery, always groused against his lean income. Like was Sam.
If that December 13 were not existed and these mutual friends, they have never been invited at the same, anti-superstition evening and she has never loved "to the life, to the the death", from the first sight.
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