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Message de margott2 posté le 17-11-2020 à 15:25:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois présenter une ville en anglais pour donner envie de la visiter.
Voici mon travail.
Est-ce qu'il serait possible de savoir s'il comporte des erreurssvp s'il vous plait ?
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. She is located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres of the border american. Several artists were in this town and she gave his name have a mythical festival. She is reputed to be overflowing charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different style. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for his atmosphere, his ambiance and her greenery but also for his story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed at the tourists and the departure is to the historical library of the town. In addition, i can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow climbing to the top of the moutains to see beautiful landscapes with a sometimes very hot climate. All these activites allow create a link with the inhabitant of the strong and sympathetic community because many people know each other. Inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don’t want exchange against a big city because money is the first preocupation. It’s a confortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Merci.
Margot
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-11-2020 15:32
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Message de margott2 posté le 17-11-2020 à 15:25:16 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Je dois présenter une ville en anglais pour donner envie de la visiter.
Voici mon travail.
Est-ce qu'il serait possible de savoir s'il comporte des erreurs
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. She is located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres of the border american. Several artists were in this town and she gave his name have a mythical festival. She is reputed to be overflowing charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different style. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for his atmosphere, his ambiance and her greenery but also for his story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed at the tourists and the departure is to the historical library of the town. In addition, i can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow climbing to the top of the moutains to see beautiful landscapes with a sometimes very hot climate. All these activites allow create a link with the inhabitant of the strong and sympathetic community because many people know each other. Inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don’t want exchange against a big city because money is the first preocupation. It’s a confortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Merci.
Margot
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Modifié par lucile83 le 17-11-2020 15:32
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Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerold, postée le 17-11-2020 à 17:04:40 (S | E)
Bonjour margott2
Les villes sont neutres, donc pas de "she" ou "her", ni de "he", "him" "his"
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. She is located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres
kilometers 
of the border american l'adjectif vient avant le nom et les adjectifs de nationalité prennent une majuscule, et problème de sens ?. Several artists were "ont vécu" in this town and she gave his name have c'est la préposition "à", pas le verbe avoir; bizarre ! a mythical festival. She is reputed to be overflowing ajoutez une préposition charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different style pluriel. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for his atmosphere, his ambiance and her greenery but also for his story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed at autre préposition the tourists and the departure is to maladroit the historical library of the town. In addition, i toujours avec majuscule can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow climbing infinitif to the top of the moutains to see beautiful landscapes with Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 18-11-2020 à 12:18:44 (S | E)
Bonsoir Gerold,
Un grand merci pour votre aide à la correction de mon travail.
Voici ma re correction, il me reste 2 erreurs en majuscule dont je n'arrive pas à traiter.
Pour le climat j'ai regarder la leçon "le temps qu'il fait" sur anglais facile mais je n'ai pas trouvé.
J'ai remplacé tous les "her", "she", "he", "his" par des "it" je sais pas si ça fonctionne tous le temps.
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres of the American border. Several artists have lived in this town and it gave it name at a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing of charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for it atmosphere, it ambiance and it greenery but also for it story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed to the tourists and the DEPARTURE IS TO the historical library of the town. In addition, I can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow climb to the top of the moutains to see beautiful landscapes with a sometimes a very hot CLIMATE. All these activites allow to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't want to exchange against a big city because money is the first preoccupation. It's a confortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Merci
Margot
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerold, postée le 19-11-2020 à 11:27:39 (S | E)
Bonjour Margot
J'ai remplacé tous les "her", "she", "he", "his" par des "it" je sais pas si ça fonctionne tous le temps. Non, "it" est un pronom personnel, pour le possessif (son, sa, ses), il faut employer "its"
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres of autre préposition ("de" ne se traduit pas toujours par "of") the American border la frontière canadienne, peut-être ?. Several artists have lived plutôt le prétérit in this town and it gave it name at autre préposition a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing of littéralement : "avec" charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for it atmosphere, it ambiance and it greenery but also for it story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed to the tourists
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 19-11-2020 à 12:35:21 (S | E)
Merci encore
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres to the American border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour is proposed to the tourists to leave from the historical library of the town. In addition, I can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow to climb to the top of the mountains to see beautiful landscapes with a sometimes very hot weather. All these activities allow to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't want to exchange against a big city because money is their first preoccupation. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerold, postée le 19-11-2020 à 13:12:24 (S | E)
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 19-11-2020 à 15:32:18 (S | E)
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres of the Canadian border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour starting from the historical library of the town is proposed to the tourists. In addition, you can do a promenade in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow to climb to the top of the mountains to see beautiful landscapes with a sometimes a very hot weather. All these activities allow to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't want to exchange against a big city. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerold, postée le 19-11-2020 à 15:53:36 (S | E)
Juste quelques points à revoir, puis c'est bon :
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres
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Modifié par lucile83 le 19-11-2020 17:36
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Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 19-11-2020 à 16:02:01 (S | E)
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at fifteen kilometres from the Canadian border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour starting from the historical library of the town is proposed to the tourists. In addition, you can to take a walk in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller ». Also, trails allow to climb to the top of the mountains to see beautiful landscapes with sometimes a very hot weather. All these activities allow to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't want to exchange against a big city. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
ET VOILA !
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerondif, postée le 19-11-2020 à 17:30:17 (S | E)
Bonjour
Erreurs en bleu, ajouts en vert
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States at(à enlever) fifteen kilometres from the Canadian border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space in the(à ôter) downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour starting from the historical library of the town is proposed to the tourists. In addition, you can to(à ôter!) take a walk in the national historic park « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller(à placer avant national) ». Also, trails allow you to (cela fait un peu français traduits, il y a des pistes qui vous permettront de... mais on voit des tournures comme : Some trails will lead you to the top of the mountains where you will be able to see/enjoy...) climb to the top of the mountains to see beautiful landscapes with sometimes a(à ôter) very hot weather. All these activities allow you to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't want (on pourrait mettre ce verbe au conditionnel) to exchange it for against a bigger city. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 19-11-2020 à 19:15:48 (S | E)
Bonjour Gerondif,
merci pour votre aide.
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States fifteen kilometres from the Canadian border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour starting from the historical library of the town is proposed to the tourists. In addition, you can take a walk in the « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller national historic park. Some trails will lead you to the top of the mountains where you will be able to see beautiful landscapes with sometimes very hot weather. All these activities allow you to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They don't would want to exchange it for against a bigger city. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerondif, postée le 19-11-2020 à 19:21:07 (S | E)
in plutôt que with dans : with sometimes very hot weather.
They don't would want to exchange it for against a bigger city. Réfléchissez avant de recopier. for remplace against et vous mélangez deux conjugaisons. Le conditionnel devrait lui aussi être à la forme négative.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 19-11-2020 à 20:31:28 (S | E)
Woodstock is a small town of less than ten thousand inhabitants. It's located in the state of New York in the United States fifteen kilometres from the Canadian border. Several artists lived in this town and it gave its name to a mythical festival. It's reputed to be overflowing with charm and original architecture. You will find for example a covered bridge and a green space downtown with restored houses around. Houses have different styles. Moreover, Woodstock is famous for its atmosphere, its ambiance and its greenery but also for its story that attracts many tourists every year. A guided tour starting from the historical library of the town is proposed to the tourists. In addition, you can take a walk in the « Marsh-Billings-Rockefeller national historic park. Some trails will lead you to the top of the mountains where you will be able to see beautiful landscapes in sometimes very hot weather. All these activities allow you to create a link with the inhabitants of the strong and friendly community because many people know each other. The inhabitants are proud of their small town. They wouldn't want to exchange it for a bigger city. It's a comfortable place and Woodstock makes you want to live simply and fully.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de gerondif, postée le 20-11-2020 à 18:55:18 (S | E)
Bonsoir
Vos dernières corrections sont justes.
Réponse : Présenter une ville/aide de margott2, postée le 20-11-2020 à 19:09:37 (S | E)
Très bien.
S'il n'y a plus d'erreurs c'est terminé.
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.
Bonne soirée
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