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Message de unelevelambda posté le 28-05-2020 à 12:41:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde !
Je suis nouveau sur ce forum
Tout d'abord j'espère que vous allez bien et que votre déconfinement s'est bien déroulé !
Voilà, je m'entraine actuellement aux synthèses d'anglais et j'aurais besoin que quelqu'un de bienveillant me signale mes erreurs grammaticales et d'orthographe (en terme d'erreurs méthodologiques, les corrigés peuvent m'aiguiller). J'ai essayé de bien me relire mais beaucoup de fautes m'échappent en général ! Merci d'avance !!!!
Le thème est la mondialisation, sujet de ccp il me semble :
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com presents globalization as a dangerous process whereas the article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and the blog post by Joseph Sunde describes globalization as a safe opportunity because nation cultures are resilient. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. Mckenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world-famous logos appears Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on countries economy and the cartoon presents globalization as a machine which transform peoples.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for globalization because it improves countries economy, for example the Ireland economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not the case for all countries, on the contrary the biggest part of country get poorer, more precisely 20 percent consume 80 percent of the production.
Nations culture (traditions, customs) look like disfigured, replaced and imposed by dominant cultures. Mckenzie avers that American culture is spreading all around the world and replaces other cultures especially by their firms implantations and their control on internet. As for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam) as someone who destroys diversity and imposes a physical unity without diversity. Yet, Hennigan refutes this thesis and says that culture is more that what you see. Furthermore, thoses Western Nations don’t really impose their culture because the Western culture is itself an alloy of imported culture. Even if concepts are imported in other countries, they are custom by local population. Sunde qualified his statement, he endorses the opinion that globalization can do damages on culture but it can be averted if populations use it as a complement and not a substitute, by being proud of their culture.
Impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. Mckenzie also presents the other side of the definition of globalization: a process which allow peoples to pool values, and he also adds that if richer country import more from “poor” countries, it will enable those countries to get richer. Sunde agree with Mckenzie and adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and made peoples even more proud of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also beneficent if great used.
Message de unelevelambda posté le 28-05-2020 à 12:41:39 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde !
Je suis nouveau sur ce forum
Tout d'abord j'espère que vous allez bien et que votre déconfinement s'est bien déroulé !
Voilà, je m'entraine actuellement aux synthèses d'anglais et j'aurais besoin que quelqu'un de bienveillant me signale mes erreurs grammaticales et d'orthographe (en terme d'erreurs méthodologiques, les corrigés peuvent m'aiguiller). J'ai essayé de bien me relire mais beaucoup de fautes m'échappent en général ! Merci d'avance !!!!
Le thème est la mondialisation, sujet de ccp il me semble :
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com presents globalization as a dangerous process whereas the article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and the blog post by Joseph Sunde describes globalization as a safe opportunity because nation cultures are resilient. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. Mckenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world-famous logos appears Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on countries economy and the cartoon presents globalization as a machine which transform peoples.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for globalization because it improves countries economy, for example the Ireland economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not the case for all countries, on the contrary the biggest part of country get poorer, more precisely 20 percent consume 80 percent of the production.
Nations culture (traditions, customs) look like disfigured, replaced and imposed by dominant cultures. Mckenzie avers that American culture is spreading all around the world and replaces other cultures especially by their firms implantations and their control on internet. As for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam) as someone who destroys diversity and imposes a physical unity without diversity. Yet, Hennigan refutes this thesis and says that culture is more that what you see. Furthermore, thoses Western Nations don’t really impose their culture because the Western culture is itself an alloy of imported culture. Even if concepts are imported in other countries, they are custom by local population. Sunde qualified his statement, he endorses the opinion that globalization can do damages on culture but it can be averted if populations use it as a complement and not a substitute, by being proud of their culture.
Impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. Mckenzie also presents the other side of the definition of globalization: a process which allow peoples to pool values, and he also adds that if richer country import more from “poor” countries, it will enable those countries to get richer. Sunde agree with Mckenzie and adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and made peoples even more proud of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also beneficent if great used.
Réponse : Synthèse /aide de gerold, postée le 28-05-2020 à 15:17:35 (S | E)
Bonjour
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com presents il y a deux sujets globalization as a dangerous process whereas the/an article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and the/a blog post by Joseph Sunde describes deux sujets globalization as a safe opportunity because nation employez l'adjectif cultures are resilient. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. McKenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world-famous logos appears ?? à revoir, et il faut une conjonction ensuite : "alors que" Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on countries economy and the cartoon presents globalization as a machine which transform conjugaison peoples correct ou non selon ce que vous voulez dire : peoples = les peuples, people = les gens.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for globalization because it improves countries economy autre construction, for example the Ireland employez l'adjectif correspondant economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not the case for all countries, on the contrary the biggest part of country la majorité des pays, pas la plus grande part du pays get poorer, more precisely 20 percent 20% de quoi ? consume 80 percent of the production.
Nations cultureadjectif + nom au pluriel (traditions, customs) look like disfigured, replaced and imposed soyez plus précis, les cultures nationales ne peuvent pas être à la fois remplacées et imposées by dominant cultures. McKenzie avers that American culture is spreading all around the world and replaces other cultures especially by their à qui ou quoi renvoie "their" ? firms implantations autre construction and their control on internet. As for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam) as someone who destroys diversity and imposes a physical unity without diversity. Yet, Hennigan refutes this thesis and says that culture is more that what you see. Furthermore, thoses Western Nations don’t really impose their culture because the Western culture is itself an alloy of imported culture pluriel. Even if concepts are imported in autre préposition other countries, they are custom ? adoptés ? by local population. Sunde qualified présent his statement, he endorses the opinion that globalization can do damages on culture but it le sujet n'est pas "globalization" can be averted if populations use it as a complement and not a substitute, by being proud of their culture.
The impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. McKenzie also presents the other side of the definition of globalization: a process which allow conjugaison peoples les peuples ou les gens ? to pool values, and he Eleanor ? also adds that if richer country pluriel import more from “poor” countries, it will enable those countries to get richer. Sunde agree conjugaison with Mckenzie and adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and made ce n'est pas un prétérit peoples even more proud adjectif court of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also beneficent if great il faut un adverbe used.
Réponse : Synthèse /aide de unelevelambda, postée le 28-05-2020 à 16:01:46 (S | E)
Bien reçu, merci énormément pour votre travail, je vais reprendre tout cela avec soin !
Réponse : Synthèse /aide de unelevelambda, postée le 29-05-2020 à 22:47:16 (S | E)
Voici donc mon corrigé avec les Barres de comptage de mots obligatoires aux concours:
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the |impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com| present globalization as a dangerous process whereas an article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and a blog post by Joseph| Sunde describe globalization as a safe opportunity because national cultures are strong. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors| concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. McKenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world-famous| logos are visible. Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on countries economy and the cartoon presents globalization as| a machine which transforms peoples.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for| globalization because it improves economy of the countries, for example the Irish economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not| the case for all countries, on the contrary majority of countries get poorer, more precisely 20 percent of countries consume| 80 percent of the production.
National cultures (traditions, customs) look like disfigured and changed by dominant cultures. McKenzie avers that| American culture is spreading all around the world and replaces other cultures especially by implanted firms and controlling internet. As| for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam) as someone who destroys diversity and imposes a| physical unity without diversity. Yet, Hennigan refutes this thesis and says that culture is more that what you see. Furthermore,| these Western Nations do not really impose their culture because the Western culture is itself an alloy of imported cultures.| Even if concepts are imported from other countries, they are adapted by local population. Sunde qualifies his statement, he endorses the opinion that globalization can do damages on culture, but| they can be averted if populations use it as a complement and not a substitute, by being proud of their| culture.
The impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. McKenzie also presents the other| side of the definition of globalization: a process which allow peoples to pool values, and she also adds that if| richer countries import more from “poor” countries, it will enable these countries to get richer. Sunde agrees with Mckenzie and| adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and make| peoples prouder of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also| beneficent if greatly used.
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Réponse : Synthèse /aide de gerold, postée le 30-05-2020 à 12:17:36 (S | E)
Bonjour
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the |impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com| present globalization as a dangerous process whereas an article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and a blog post by Joseph| Sunde describe globalization as a safe opportunity because national cultures are strong. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors| concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. McKenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world-famous| logos are visible soit all around the world, famous| logos are visible, soit all around, world-famous| logos are visible. Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on countries economy structure avec "of" and the cartoon presents globalization as| a machine which transforms peoples.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for| globalization because it improves the economy of the countries, for example the Irish economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not| the case for all countries, on the contrary
National cultures (traditions, customs) look
The impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. McKenzie also presents the other| side of the definition of globalization: a process which allow conjugaison peoples to pool values, and she also adds that if| richer countries import more from "poor" countries, it will enable these countries to get richer. Sunde agrees with Mckenzie and| adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and make| peoples prouder of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also| beneficent if greatly used = très utilisé, je pense que vous voulez plutôt dire "habilement".
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Réponse : Synthèse /aide de unelevelambda, postée le 01-06-2020 à 10:16:06 (S | E)
Voici ma forme finale, j'espère que cette fois-ci sera la bonne
Does globalization represent a risk for culture ?
Against the backdrop of globalization, the authors of 4 recent documents ponder the |impact on culture. An article on the website classroom.synonym.com written by Eleanor McKenzie and a cartoon from the website moziru.com| present globalization as a dangerous process whereas an article by Andrew Hennigan on www.quora.com and a blog post by Joseph| Sunde describe globalization as a safe opportunity because national cultures are strong. Is globalization a danger for culture ?
The authors| concur that globalization is a process with concrete and visible effects. McKenzie and Hennigan declare that all around the world, famous| logos are visible. Sunde contends that it has a certain impact on economy of countries and the cartoon presents globalization as| a machine which transforms peoples.
Globalization has an impact on economy and creates cultural disparities. Hennigan makes a plea for| globalization because it improves the economy of the countries, for example the Irish economy. However, McKenzie claims that it is not| the case for all countries, on the contrary most countries get poorer, more precisely 20 percent of countries consume| 80 percent of the production.
National cultures (traditions, customs) look disfigured and changed by dominant cultures. McKenzie avers that| American culture is spreading all around the world and replaces other cultures especially by controlling internet. As| for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam) as someone who destroys diversity and imposes a| physical unity without diversity. Yet, Hennigan refutes this thesis and declare “culture is more than what you see”. Furthermore,| these Western Nations do not really impose their culture because Western culture is itself an alloy of imported cultures.| Even if concepts are imported from other countries, they are adapted by local population. Sunde qualifies his statement, he endorses the opinion that globalization can do damages to culture, but| they can be averted if populations use it as a complement and not a substitute, by being proud of their| culture.
The impact of globalization on cultures can be beneficial if globalization is cleverly directed. McKenzie also presents the other| side of the definition of globalization: a process which allows peoples to pool values, and she also adds that if| richer countries import more from "poor" countries, it will enable these countries to get richer. Sunde agrees with Mckenzie and| adds that globalization can even be an opportunity for nations. Globalization can allow peoples to share their culture and make| peoples prouder of it.
Ultimately, globalization has a real impact on culture but this impact can be dangerous but also| beneficent if cleverly used.
424 words
Réponse : Synthèse /aide de gerold, postée le 01-06-2020 à 11:08:23 (S | E)
Bonjour
Cela me semble correct. J'ai quand même un doute à propos de "As| for the picture, it also describes Western nations (personified by Uncle Sam)..." "Uncle Sam" incarne les USA, mais les nations occidentales en général ? Surprenant !
Réponse : Synthèse /aide de unelevelambda, postée le 01-06-2020 à 15:11:14 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Tout d'abord merci beaucoup beaucoup pour votre formidable travail !
Ensuite, j'ai en effet peut-être mal interprété le document, je vais d'ailleurs reprendre le corrigé officiel pour étudier leur plan et les idées clefs et les comparer à mon travail !
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